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- May 23, 2019
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now that some serious group baby making ure planning thereAny threesome scenes planned ?
Btw just subbed on pat.
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Lovely little game thus far, the artwork is simply gorgeous. Real shame Hannah only teases some sex at the altar right now. Same for Sally at the shop. I even laughed when I, erhm, accidentally tried to use the knife on Anshi at the start
Anyway, here's some text you might want to fix, Foxyghost
* If you choose to keep watching Anshi, she'll say "Holly shit", should be "Holy"
* On the first list of questions with Anshi, one reads "you live rigth here? along?" - should be "right" and "alone"
* After the "nevermind", one of Anshi's texts reads "Ahah, relax, im joking" - i'm
* "Look! There are pieces of scrap under the tree" - the phrase would read better as "Look! There are pieces of scrap under the tree. Just cut off the wires."
* At one point, while you're supposed to cut the stuff, Anshi will say "Just take a knife and cut the whires and leafs" - "wires" + "some leaves"
* Once you show the loincloth, "Look great!" - should be either "Looks" or "Looking"
* "Are you talking about blowjob" - should probably be either "about the" or "about that" -- The following "its so weird" should be it's
* "You sucked my dick when I was passed out" - "while" works better than "when" in this case
* "You are no longer attracted to me?" - "Are you..."
* "Honestly me attract to you too" - "Honestly I'm attracted to you, too"
* "Oh... it becoming hard" - "it's", also "getting" rather than "becoming" would probably read better
* "I feel like I haven't cumed in a thousand years" - better use "come" or "cummed", not sure how correct the latter is
* "I don't know how you did that, but it's amazing" - "but it was"
* "We can go?" - Can we go?
* "Sperm need to get into the vagina to get pregnant" - needs
* "I want to show it to Hannah" - Is Anshi intent on showing the player or just the player's dick to Hannah? If the first option, "show him to" - also, shouldn't it be Hanna?
* Once you enter the Shamaness hut the first time, Hanna: "My eyes don't deceive me?" - "Do my eyes deceive me" would read better
* "He definitely have a dick" - has
* If you go with the "messenger of the gods" options, Player: "How you talk to me!" - I think the intent was "Watch how you talk to me!" --- The next message "some bunch of furry" - either "a bunch of furry" or "some furry" reads better
* When you ask "Who are you" to Hanna and Rina, she says "children of Aphelia and Mehanus" - Mechanus. Some messages later, Hanna again says "Mehanus"
* Some time later, Hanna says "Afelia herself gave it to us"
* Talking to Rina downstairs, after she says Hanna is "obsessed with them" (the robots), the next message, "Do you think she's crazy?" incorrectly shows Rina's name instead of the player. "But not you?" also shows as being Rina talking.
When you die (knife on Anshi, growling at Marra) the text starts with "The forrest", it should be "The forest"
By the way, I think you can define the names as python variables, that can help with keeping them consistent and, if you ever need to change it, much easier to deal with.
Anyway, here's some text you might want to fix, Foxyghost
* If you choose to keep watching Anshi, she'll say "Holly shit", should be "Holy"
* On the first list of questions with Anshi, one reads "you live rigth here? along?" - should be "right" and "alone"
* After the "nevermind", one of Anshi's texts reads "Ahah, relax, im joking" - i'm
* "Look! There are pieces of scrap under the tree" - the phrase would read better as "Look! There are pieces of scrap under the tree. Just cut off the wires."
* At one point, while you're supposed to cut the stuff, Anshi will say "Just take a knife and cut the whires and leafs" - "wires" + "some leaves"
* Once you show the loincloth, "Look great!" - should be either "Looks" or "Looking"
* "Are you talking about blowjob" - should probably be either "about the" or "about that" -- The following "its so weird" should be it's
* "You sucked my dick when I was passed out" - "while" works better than "when" in this case
* "You are no longer attracted to me?" - "Are you..."
* "Honestly me attract to you too" - "Honestly I'm attracted to you, too"
* "Oh... it becoming hard" - "it's", also "getting" rather than "becoming" would probably read better
* "I feel like I haven't cumed in a thousand years" - better use "come" or "cummed", not sure how correct the latter is
* "I don't know how you did that, but it's amazing" - "but it was"
* "We can go?" - Can we go?
* "Sperm need to get into the vagina to get pregnant" - needs
* "I want to show it to Hannah" - Is Anshi intent on showing the player or just the player's dick to Hannah? If the first option, "show him to" - also, shouldn't it be Hanna?
* Once you enter the Shamaness hut the first time, Hanna: "My eyes don't deceive me?" - "Do my eyes deceive me" would read better
* "He definitely have a dick" - has
* If you go with the "messenger of the gods" options, Player: "How you talk to me!" - I think the intent was "Watch how you talk to me!" --- The next message "some bunch of furry" - either "a bunch of furry" or "some furry" reads better
* When you ask "Who are you" to Hanna and Rina, she says "children of Aphelia and Mehanus" - Mechanus. Some messages later, Hanna again says "Mehanus"
* Some time later, Hanna says "Afelia herself gave it to us"
* Talking to Rina downstairs, after she says Hanna is "obsessed with them" (the robots), the next message, "Do you think she's crazy?" incorrectly shows Rina's name instead of the player. "But not you?" also shows as being Rina talking.
When you die (knife on Anshi, growling at Marra) the text starts with "The forrest", it should be "The forest"
By the way, I think you can define the names as python variables, that can help with keeping them consistent and, if you ever need to change it, much easier to deal with.
- May 23, 2019
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i wanted to say dying from marra makes no sense since she saw anshi coming with us to the gate obviously and later she tells they are desperate enough to kidnap males for their spunk, so killing human makes no sense to me and also espetially when we piss Rina off, just because we piss Rina they throw us out? seems a little too harsh for someone who is desperate to kidnap males
- Sep 2, 2018
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It makes sense if you see them as thinking beings, which they are. "Oh, look, a fucking furless clown who may actually be more trouble than he's worth" Also, at this point, the MC is effectively an alien to them, they don't know if he can impregnate them or what the baby would look like if he could, which is the whole point of Rina's hands-on testing. They're not desperate enough to put up with an asshole fucking around, so they quickly show him the find out part
well i think the impregnate parts is already covered if Hannah gave birth to a mouse cuz most likely a mouse fucked, and Anshi's mom is a gazel then most like her dad is a fox then maybe their babies may look like humans MAYBE just a theory
- May 23, 2019
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rinas dad was a lion Hanna explain this if u choose certain dialogue option, and all children look the same at birth until they take on some furry form based on environment i think
- May 23, 2019
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yeah u need to pick option "noone has ever died from good sex" i think then when u ask questions the option will pop up why rina is a rat and hanna is a wolf then hanna will tell you about rinas dad and rina will tell you all kids look the same until certain point when they will shape to enviroment or sumtin like dat
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Ohh, thank you so much for such a detailed review! It was really helpful, though I have to admit, some parts made me feel a bit silly, hehe.
I've fixed everything you pointed out, so there should be a little fewer mistakes in the next versions. Thanks again!
- May 23, 2019
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is pregnancy content planned?
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so sally said he looks better than she imagined so i dont think they think of him as a clown, Rina only said he was looking weird and thats all, but who cares about Rina in the end she wanted a dick and shouldnt get one unless she asked nicely
Marra said she wouldnt want us gone from village Hanna said we got nice D Anshi looks in love so no i wouldnt say they think of us as some
Any idea why foxyghost ain't updating his patreon? He usually update weekly but it's been over a month now